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Post by spookyrider on Oct 24, 2010 11:12:33 GMT -5
Ok, well I am making good progress on my version. I will type just a bit further to get a good, fair size to put on here for you. Now, mine isn't too scary just yet; just startling. And I put a little humor into it, as well. I really think you guys will like it!
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 24, 2010 12:27:32 GMT -5
Ok. Now, keep in mind this isn't suppose to be a story that will give you nightmares; it's just a gross comedy. So......here you go!
The Cookie Crumbles A Tracy-inspired story written by Frank Albrecht
Opening Credits
As the credits play, the Haunted House organ tune plays. The credits are shown over a shot of the house (in black-and-white), panning out as the credits run. The house has crooked chimneys and worn siding. Once the last name disappears from the screen, the image turns to color, and the music stops. The camera goes down from the house, focusing on a little girl walking down the sidewalk.
Scene One
Susan, a blonde eight-year-old girl scout is making her door-to-door trip, wanting to fill the stomachs of the good townsfolk with her troop’s delicious cookies and brownies. Her next stop is an old-looking house sitting on the lake shore. There are many trees surrounding it.
Susan: “Wow. What a fixer-upper. Probably weak elders who can’t do their own renovation work.”
Susan pointed this out, and continued down the sidewalk to the front door of the home. She rings the doorbell. For the next minute or so, the door remains shut, with no sign of human life walking up to open it. Just as Susan is about to turn around and go to the next house, she hears a groan from inside.
Susan: “Oh no! They’ve probably fallen! I’M COMIN’!”
Susan barges into the house, and calls out for the poor old man who made the noise. The interior of the house also looked dusty. There was a staircase going up to the second floor, a large worn area rug, and a hall on one side. The only light coming into the house was that coming through the front windows and a window high above her. Susan rushes down the hall. She comes across an open door, from which strange sounds are leaking out of. She peeks in and is shocked at what she sees. There’s a middle-aged man in a striped suit plunging a guy down a toilet. (this is a reference to the Last Drop) The man in the suit (Charles) is furiously beating and forcing the guy down, while his face looks red with anger.
Charles: “THAT’S IT, YOU WRETCHED PLUMBER! YOU NEVER DO YOUR JOB RIGHT! THERE’S WATER POURING EVERYWHERE IN MY CELLAR! YOU NEVER FIX THE PIPES EFFICIENTLY!”
At the time Susan cries out and drops her cookie bag, and Charles turns around at the sound. She is a witness of his crime, and he didn’t want to let her go.
Charles: “PHILIP, HURRY UP AND LOCK THE FRONT DOOR!”
Susan stands there with panic. ‘Philip’ still doesn’t arrive in the great hall.
Charles: “God, Philip!”
Charles runs to the door himself, with the little girl trying to rush ahead of him. It is too late, for Charles locks the door, and tackles Susan.
Charles: “I’ve got you now!” Susan: “AHHHHHHH!!!!!”
Charles carries Susan down the hall, past the room with the screaming plumber, to the cellar door. He walks down halfway, and then tosses her the rest of the way down the stairs. Charles runs back up the steps, and locks the door behind him. Susan is now trapped in the damp, cold cellar. It is very dark, with only a little light coming from a small crack near the ceiling. Water is leaking from various pipes above her. The cellar is inhabited by snakes, frogs, and…….. (a reference to Tracy’s Body in the Cellar scene)
Susan: “HELP! SOMEBODY! PLEASE!”
Susan was trying her best to be found out by the neighbors next door, but with only a small crack leading to the outside, it was impossible for anyone to hear her. However, her screaming did attract a creature in a dark corner opposite from Susan. It was a giant rat! (a reference to Tracy’s Giant Rat)
Scene Two
Meanwhile, back on the ground floor, Charles walks back into the great hall. He yells out for his maid, Monica. (Monica is the prop called ‘Welcomer’ from Tracy’s Spiral Catalog)
Charles: Monica, please drag Philip to the gallows at once. I will no longer tolerate his laziness. (this is a reference to a couple of Tracy’s stunts involving the gallows)
Monica: (peering in from an archway in the great hall) Yes, master.
Monica goes back through the archway, into a room with many portraits and doors (these portraits are the same ones in the Haunted House) and she enters one, and we hear this:
Philip: “Wha? Whereareya takin’ me? -HIC- I didn’t do nuthun!”
Monica: “The master cannot allow your constant slacking!”
You hear Monica pulling the butler out of the wine cellar (this is a reference to Tracy's Boiled Butler), and the falling of a few barrels (a reference to Tracy’s Falling Barrels) We now see the butler being hurled out of the room by Monica, and he falls face first onto the floor, smashing his spectacles.
Monica: “Beth, a little assistance here?”
Just then, as if calling her name transported her to you, Beth is standing right beside Monica, and joined in helping her pull Philip to the dungeon. (Beth is Tracy’s bar woman from Fright Zone.) The camera then pans away from the archway, and back to Charles, standing in the middle of the great hall. The camera stays on his face. We hear a loud racket in the distance, and Charles now looks satisfied. The camera cuts to Susan back in the cellar.
The rat is now a foot away from Susan, and she could faintly see his grisly face, with flaming eyes and blood-stained teeth. Susan is huddled in the corner, just waiting for her to get eaten alive, but just when the rat is opening its mighty jaws, the cellar door opens, bringing in a beam of light. The rat stands there in shock. Charles stands on the head of the stairs.
Charles: (with a mouthful of cookies) “Monica!”
Charles snaps his fingers, and *poof* there’s Monica, holding the former butler’s arm. Charles snatches it from her, and throws it down the staircase. Susan is looking relieved, but is also confused. Charles: “Hey, little girl!”
Susan: “Yes sir?”
Charles: “I’ve tasted your cookies. They are the best d**n thing I’ve had since Pete made his special fried lobster platter for my fiftieth birthday.”
Susan: “Uh…I’m glad you like them, sir, but you see I didn’t make….”
Just then, Susan thought how stupid she was for almost letting that out. Admitting she didn’t make them would mean she would have to stay in the cellar with the giant rat, which is now munching happily on the butler’s arm. If she said she did make them, she would probably get her own room, with a window that may lead to freedom!
Charles: “Eh? Didn’t make what?”
Susan: “Eh….didn’t make…..I…I….I didn’t make it home in time for supper…….”
Charles looks over at Monica, he mouths something, she says “1:00”, Charles looks back down to Susan.
Charles: “Supper? Supper? Really?…..you have a weird family, kid. Well, come up to me. You shouldn’t be down here! You should be using your talent in the kitchen and make us a delicious smorgasbord of sweets. Monica! Show…….um……..name?”
He looks down at Susan, she looks hopeful.
Susan: “Uh….Susan, sir”
Charles: “Excellent! Hello, I’m Charles!”
Susan: “Hello Charles.”
Charles: “OH! Right…um…Monica, please show Susan to her room. And Beth! (Beth appears) Beth, go call Sam and the clowns: We’re having a feast tonight.”
Susan gets up off the wet floor, and makers her way past the feeding rat to the stairs. Once Susan is at the top, Monica guides her up the stairs to the servant’s quarters. The upstairs hallway is much like the hallway on the ground floor: old worn wallpaper, and dusty floorboards. Monica takes Susan a couple of doors down to her room. At the end of the hallway is a stained glass window, and to the right of that were a small, steep set of stairs.
Monica: “Over there is a servant’s stairway going straight down to the kitchen and laundry. I’ll now show you your room.”
Monica opens the door wide and shoves Susan in. The room looks better than the condition of the rest of the house. The floral wallpaper wasn’t quite faded. There was a bed, a nightstand with an old lamp on it, and…windows! To Susan, it didn’t matter that she was living on the second floor; she was willing to break a leg escaping that mad house! (the bedroom is a reference to Tracy’s Upside-down room. The upside-down part will be used later on in the story)
Susan: “Thank you so much!”
Monica: “There is no need to thank me. I simply take my master’s orders. If I were in charge, I would’ve left you down in the basement with Mickey.”
Susan: “Augh……” Monica: “Come. I must show you the kitchen.”
Monica guides Susan down the steep stairway, and entered the kitchen. The kitchen was slightly dirty. Above the sink was a window, but behind the window was just a wall of brick.
Monica: (puts on a fake smile) “Hello, Pete. Show the girl around the kitchen, will you? She’s your new assistant chef.”
(Pete is the chef from the Pirate Ship Skua.)
Pete: “Huh? Her?! Did the master tell you to do this?! Why would he want this filthy thingyroach to cook his food? (pointing at Susan)”
Monica: “Yes. He tried her cookies. I haven’t had one myself, but apparently they’re pretty d**n good.” (snaps fingers)
Beth comes from nowhere, holding the box of cookies. The box is passed around so they all try one.
Pete: (with mouthful of cookies) “Ok. I accept you. Come. I’ll show you where everything is.”
Monica and Beth left the room, leaving Pete to finish the tour.
Pete: “Ok. These are the cupboard holding the dishes, ok? Moving on. Over here is the sink. And what a view when you’re washing dishes!”
Susan: “Haha…so….why is there a brick wall here?”
Pete: “Oh! Yeah…a few years ago, master decided to tear down the stupid courtyard. It’s now an expansion of the house. (this is in honor of the weirdness of Tracy) Moving on. Over here are your pots and pans. Over there is the oven. That door there is to the pantry. That over there is the meat locker, and lastly that door over there is a quick way to get to the wine cellar…..you shouldn’t be in there too much, kid! Ok, now this here is my station. You work over at that oven. And I know how you kids are messy. So, I’m warning you: if you get even the smallest drop of chocolate on my new suit (pats his uniform), I will get you back for it. Are we clear on this, girl?”
Susan: Yes sir. I’ll get right to work.
At this point, Susan is startled. She must make a variety of sweets for the party that afternoon. She didn’t know how to make cookies!
Susan: “Uh…..is there a certain dish that the master likes?”
Pete: (tilts head) Uh….I haven’t made a dessert for a long time. I’m better at meals. We just get our donuts from the Stop-n-Shop down the street. Sorry. But, I believe there’s an old recipe book in the cupboard up there. (points to the cupboard)”
Susan: “Thank you, sir.”
Susan stretched up for the top cabinet for the book. She pulled out an old, torn, brown book that was falling apart, with many pages sticking out. This was the only help she was offered. Susan now had to make a platter of treats due later in the day. Susan had to push on until she found an opportunity to escape.
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Post by the TROID! on Oct 24, 2010 12:57:52 GMT -5
WOW, I LIKE IT ;D
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 24, 2010 12:58:39 GMT -5
Thank you!
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Post by nickanap on Oct 24, 2010 15:26:27 GMT -5
Dude, YOU SHOULD GO TO HOLLYWOOD!!!
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Post by the TROID! on Oct 24, 2010 15:30:43 GMT -5
Dude, YOU SHOULD GO TO HOLLYWOOD!!! I think i dont need to write my own script now, yours is seriously good enough to make into a movie. I would even help contribute time i have to help you with the actual movie
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 24, 2010 16:43:44 GMT -5
Troy, you should write yours still! Don't stop believin'! Thank you, Nick! I'm still contemplating on which actors should be who. I know I want Steve Buscemi to play Charles. Tell me what you guys think, if this was a movie, who you would pick for the parts.
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Post by mttbrilhart on Oct 24, 2010 18:12:08 GMT -5
I like it ; again, a much different approach. Yours has that Tim Burton sort of feel to it; Troy's sounded like a Rob Zombie inspired theme. Can't wait to hear the rest of it. ;D
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Post by the TROID! on Oct 24, 2010 19:23:09 GMT -5
nah, I think that you should see Mike's post where I posted the first part of my summary. I havent even started writing the scrirpt, I have just kept that idea in my head
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 24, 2010 19:26:00 GMT -5
Well, I did reread it. And I think it sounds interesting. Just imagine all the things that could happen to him in just those three days!
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 25, 2010 20:19:02 GMT -5
Update!
Pretty soon I will post the next few scenes of the script, including the first big event in the story. I hope you will like it!
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 25, 2010 21:05:02 GMT -5
Ok! I didn't type as far as I hoped, but the rest will come tomorrow!
Scene Three
Susan opened up to a recipe called “Granny’s Cookies”. She decided these would be a perfect surprise for Charles. She thought he would remember the sweet, delicious taste of his grandmother’s homemade cookies!
Susan: (saying aloud to self) “Two cups of white sugar”
While Susan is preparing all the ingredients, Pete is glancing over now and then from his station, making sure she is doing it properly. Susan pulls out the sugar from the bottom cupboard, and gets out the measuring cups. She is totally foreign to this, and so she goes at a slow pace, making sure every detail is right. She continues reading the recipe to herself.
Susan: “Four sticks of butter”
Just as Susan found the butter and plopped them into the mixing bowl, Charles enters the kitchen with an ugly woman with bulging eyes wearing a red dress. Along with her hideousness, she also has sagging breasts. (this is Tracy’s B-Girl stunt)
Susan looks startled, because so suddenly this ugly monster struts into the room.
Charles: “Hello, Susan! I’d like you to meet my wife, Ruth.”
Ruth: “Hello!” (she waves at Susan, also twiddling her fingers)
Susan: “Uh….hello.”
Ruth: “We’re both very excited for the party tonight! Can’t wait to taste your cookies! I brought along some friends from my book club; you’ll find that they’re quite a hoot!”
Susan: “Uh…great! I’ll be sure to cook extra harder!”
Ruth walks out of the kitchen giggling. All this time, Pete pays no attention to their conversation, and just continues cooking. Charles goes over to Susan and whispers:
Charles: “You better be joking about that trying harder thing. You should do your best, no matter how many you’re serving. You understand me?”
Susan looks afraid.
Susan: “Oh….uh..y..yes,sir. Sorry.
Charles walks out of the kitchen with a smirk. Susan carries on with her cooking.
Susan: “ (reading aloud from recipe book) Four well-beaten eggs…..ok…..
Susan rushes to the fridge.
Pete: “Oh!”
(His sudden outburst made Susan jump)
Pete opens a cupboard at his station, and pulls out a hammer. He gives it to Susan, which makes her very confused.
Pete: “Uh..sorry! There’s only one hammer in this kitchen! Here!” (scratches his head)
Susan: (chuckles) Uh….why would I need that to prepare the eggs?”
Pete: “Yeah….the master likes his eggs beaten the correct way. I’m sorry.”
Susan: “Uh…very well then!”
She drops the eggs into the bowl, and smashes them with the hammer. Right at the sound of the hammer hitting the eggs, the camera cuts to the great hall, where Charles, Monica, and Beth are awaiting the guests. The door suddenly opens, and we hear a lot of chatter outside. The first person to enter is a skinny man with blonde hair, wearing a vest and a straw hat. (this man is the piano man from Fright Zone)
Charles: “Good evening, Sam!” (he nods his head while receiving a handshake)
Sam: “Hello, Chuck! I’ve got a great music agenda planned just for tonight!” (he says this while removing his black jacket, handing to Beth to hang up. While doing so he gives her a quick kiss on the cheek)
Charles: “That’s great to hear! You do plan to play a lot of Joplin, I hope?”
Sam: “Oh, you bet!” (he says this while walking through the archway to the party room)
Next enter three deformed clowns, named Larry, Barry, and Harry.(these are Tracy’s clowns from the Birthday Party)
Larry: “Hi, Charles! We came up with new skits; we thought the tie skit was getting old….”
Charles: (shakes all their hands) Excellent! You must’ve overheard Ruth and I complaining after the previous show! Well, thank you for replacing it!”
The three clowns walk off with a hurt expression through the archway, bringing their prop trunks with them.
Charles: (leans his head back toward the arch) “Oh, boys! Whenever you have to use the restroom, please don’t use the one out here! It’s…..ahem…..clogged…or something.”
Barry: “But Charles (he hollers this from the hall), on your Twitter you said that a plumber would be coming today around 1pm……”
Charles: “WELL, HE DIDN’T SHOW! Now go get set up!”
Next, the bartender wearing a green jacket enters the door. His name is Moe. (this is Tracy's Bartender)
Charles: (quickly turns away from the portrait hall) Oh! Hello, Moe! Got more beer?”
Moe: “Yeah, I did. I also bought a bucket of wings!”
Charles: “Thanks! Just set it on the table in the party room!”
Moe: (while walking toward the arch) Ok!”
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Post by mttbrilhart on Oct 25, 2010 22:42:35 GMT -5
I knew who this was:This is an awesome story so far; way different from mine, but awesome...
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 26, 2010 14:13:38 GMT -5
Uh, sorry, the picture isn't showing for me. But thanks! I do write this, not to be frightening, but to be humorous.
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Post by mttbrilhart on Oct 26, 2010 15:18:55 GMT -5
I really could see this as a Tim Burton Claymation film like Nightmare Before Christmas or Corpse Bride; that image was of the Character you described from Knobebels Haunted House, Ruth.
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 26, 2010 15:27:19 GMT -5
Oh! Yes, that's her all right! I just used the catalog term. I just love her, don't you! I could picture this a claymation, but I would rather a live action/computerized.
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 26, 2010 15:52:00 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Update[/glow]
I will be posting more of the story pretty soon!
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Post by the TROID! on Oct 26, 2010 16:21:33 GMT -5
Awesome!
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 26, 2010 16:22:50 GMT -5
I'm just adding a few more sentences of Scene Four; I thought if I didn't it would be too sad.
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Post by spookyrider on Oct 26, 2010 16:30:26 GMT -5
Next arrives a group of three people. One of them was a big-eared man wearing a green jacket with blue suit pants (Tracy‘s Head Slinger), another one was a Southern man wearing a red plaid shirt (Tracy‘s One for the Range man), and lastly there was a freckled, heavyset woman wearing a lovely greenish-blue jacket and a red-and-white striped shirt underneath (Laughing Sal).
Charles: (to Southern man) Hello, Scott! Don’t drink too much!
Scott: “Pft. Chuck, you know this wouldn’t be no party without it!” (slaps Charles’s back while heading for archway)
Charles: “OH! (as the Head Slinger is about to walk passed him) Edgar, you too! Please don’t overload on the drinks; remember how you lost your head at the last party, right?”
Edgar: “Sorry, I’ll try!”
Both Scott and Edgar head for the party room). Next Sal is greeted by Charles.
Sal: (Laughs) Hello, Charlie! Can’t wait for the party!”
Charles: “Hey, Sal! OH! Uh…where’s your husband, Sam? Did he not want to come tonight?” (tilts his head)
Sal: (Stops laughing) “Well…..Sam never stops laughing at me….I think it’s because..(sobs)…because…..(sobs)…I’M UGLY!” (horrendous sobbing follows)
Charles: “I’m sorry to hear that…but, don’t you laugh at him as well?”
Sal: (Sobs, and looks Charles intently in the eyes) “No…(sobs) the reason why I laugh is…(sobs)…is…to HIDE THE TEARS! BLAHHhhHhh!” (with that, Sal runs off sobbing all the way to the party room)
Charles: (Hollering over shoulder) “A…And he’s wrong! YOU ARE NOT UGLY! YOU’RE A VERY PRETTY WOMAN!”
Ruth now walks down the stairs, ready and prepared for the party.
Charles: “Is that all the people from your book club, dear? Sal, Edgar, and Scott?”
Ruth: “Uhhuh! Now time to party!” (Ruth spreads her arms in delight)
Scene Four
The camera cuts to the party room. It is a very large room, decorated with balloons and garland, and a disco ball. There is an upright piano in the room, many old-fashioned sofas, and lastly the long snack table covered with Pete’s hot, tasty meals and Susan’s cookies and brownies. The camera focuses on this table, with Pete and Susan standing beside it waiting for the guests’ approval. In the background we hear Sam playing the Maple Leaf Rag on the piano.
Sal: (trying one of Susan‘s brownies) “Hmmm…so good! This really fights my sadness! Hahahahaha!” (we can see slight tears forming in her eyes)
Scott: (tasting Susan‘s cookie) “My mama back in Miss’sipey made better cookies than these, but these are pretty darn good, ‘pecially for a girl yur age!”
Ruth: (tasting Pete’s pork) “Hmm….this is your best, Pete!”
Pete: (bowing to her) “Thank you, madam!”
The guests seem to be enjoying the food. Monica and Beth are also chowing down at the table. Charles walks toward the table, looking at Susan. He smiles and takes a cookie.
Charles: (after swallowing it) “Susan, you truly are a gifted cook!”
Susan: (relieved) “Do you recognize the taste?”
Charles: (thinks a little, then shrugs) “I can’t say…to me it just tasted like a fantastic cookie. Why?”
Susan: “I used a recipe from the old cook book. It’s called ‘Granny’s Cookies’. You surely must’ve tasted your grandma’s cookies, right?”
Charles: (laughs) “You mean that cook book. Yeah..sorry! That recipe didn’t belong to my grandmother! But, the book did! That recipe must’ve been her grandmother’s! In the front cover, it should say ’Hubbard’, that’s her last name. I’m sorry you didn‘t catch that!”
(The name of his great-great-grandmother refer to Tracy’s stunt Old Mother Hubbard)
The camera then cuts to a later event of the party, where the guests are sitting around the piano, watching Sam play magnificently. In the very back of the crowd stand Susan and Edgar.
Susan: (whispers up to Edgar) “Uh..sir?”
Edgar: (leans down to answer her) “Yes, what is it?”
Susan: (still whispering) “Sir…could you please help me escape from here! You must know that this a jail! He’s got me trapped!”
Edgar: “Ok, uh..Susan is it? I will help you escape. How about after the party, you stay to the side of me. They probably won’t see you.”
Susan: (cries) “Thank you!”
The piano playing went on for another hour, with the song The Easy Winners. This is followed by a loud roar of applause. The party then moves on to the clowns’ performance. They do a series of gags, including a pie throw (that was unexpectedly filled with cottage cheese), a flower water-squirter, and then ended with an unusual act of pulling a fake head out of a cake. Everyone was laughing through their show, especially Sal, who started heaving with laughter. The camera cuts to the great hall, where the guests are starting to leave. Monica and Beth are smiling and waving goodbye to their guests as they each walk out the front door. Just feeling the cold air rushing in made Susan smile, as she hid to the side of Edgar. Charles is standing holding the door open, on the right side.
Charles: “Goodbye, Sal! Bye-bye Larry, Barry, Harry! You were fantastic! And goodbye, Scott! You look well enough to drive this time. Go ahead! See you!”
You hear them call out goodbye from outside, along with the slamming of car doors. The last person to leave is Edgar, along with Susan.
Edgar: “Farewell, Charles! See you next time!” (Edgar tries to leave very quickly in order to hide that Susan’s there.
Charles: (Holds hand in front of Edgar, preventing him from going) “HOLD IT!”
Edgar looks frightened.
Charles: “Susan?! IS THAT YOU?!”
Edgar gasps. Susan is too scared to move.
Charles: “H…HOW COULD YOU?!” (He says this while pushing Edgar down the steps of the front door, and pins Susan to the wall, also snapping his fingers for Monica and Beth to go over to him)
Susan screams. Edgar quickly yells:
Edgar: “NO! CHARLES! IT WAS ME! I WANTED TO ROB HER FROM YOU! I WANTED HER TO COOK FOR ME!!!!! DON’T HURT HER!”
Charles: (after pushing Susan to the floor) REALLY?! (snaps fingers) Monica, Beth. Please take Edgar here to the guillotine immediately.”
Monica and Beth yank Edgar from the front steps, and escort him to the dungeon.
Susan: (getting up off the floor) “NO! LEAVE HIM ALONE! (cries tremendously)”
Susan continues crying while Charles quickly walks over to the front door to lock it.
Charles: You must go to bed now, Susan. Why did you let him do it? Is my kitchen not good enough for you?”
Charles stomps angrily through the archway. Once Susan hears the snap of a blade coming from far down the hall, she rushes up the stairs crying, and slams herself down on her bed. She cried herself to sleep, thinking sadly of Edgar’s sacrifice.
Scene Five
The following morning, Susan woke up to find a package with a letter sitting on top of it near the door. She looks curious, and gets up to examine it. She first opens the letter, reading this: (the camera gets an over-the-shoulder-shot of the letter in Susan’s hands)
Dear Susan,
I’m sorry for the way I behaved last night. It was wrong of me to hurt you; he probably just coaxed you with a chocolate bar. I know how kids can’t resist chocolate. Here. This is for you.
Sincerely, Charles
Susan then opens up the package and finds a neatly folded chef’s suit of her own, even with her name stitched on the left breast. Even with this nice gift, Susan still felt hatred toward Charles. She undressed from her girl scout uniform and changed into her new outfit. She then made her way out of the room, and down the servant’s stairway, carrying her dirty clothes.
Susan: (leans head in kitchen door) “Hey, Pete, the door over here is the laundry room, isn’t it?”
Pete: “Yes it is! I love the new suit!”
Susan: “Thanks! It was a gift from Charles!” (she says, pretending to be happy)
Susan went to the laundry room doors, and opened them. She gasps and quickly closes them. Susan slowly makes her way back to the kitchen. (we are not yet informed of what’s in there; the camera doesn’t catch it)
Susan: “Uh…..Pete…what’s in there?”
Pete: “OH! HAHAHAHA! Sorry, I should’ve told you!”
Pete walks with Susan back to the laundry room. He opens it up again. We see a Chinese Man in a kimono standing in a troth of dirty clothes, holding onto the handle of a water pump. (this is Tracy’s stunt called Chinese Laundry)
Pete: “Don’t be frightened, Susan! It’s just Ham-Chu! He’s a friend!” (smiles at Ham-Chu)
Ham-Chu: “Hello! I ready for service!” (he smiles at Susan)
Susan: “Uh..hello, Ham-Chu! Excuse me for a moment…”
Susan walks away from the laundry room with Pete. In the background we see that Ham-Chu is still smiling.
Susan: (whispers angrily) “You are awful! You can’t do this!”
Pete: “First of all, it wasn’t my idea. It was the master’s, and second: he really loves it!”
Susan: “Well does he have a room? Do you feed him?”
Pete: “To answer your first question: No, he just stays in there. And for the second question: I can’t cook Chinese food, and there aren’t any Chinese restaurants in the area. (shrugs)”
Susan: “You’re terrible! Just because he’s not from America doesn’t mean he can’t have American food. So…how does he survive without food?!”
Both of them are stumped by this. They slowly walk back to the laundry room.
Ham-Chu: “Hello! I ready for service!” (he smiles at Susan)
Susan hesitantly drops her clothes in the troth, and Ham-Chu starts pushing the lever. However, the water pours from his ears.
Ham-Chu: “Thank you! Ready in half hour!”
Susan turns around to see the chef gone. She closes the laundry room’s sliding doors and enters the kitchen.
By the way, if you aren't familiar with this stunt, his name is actually Ham-Chu. I just added that ending to give you a laugh!
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Post by spookyrider on Nov 3, 2010 14:36:56 GMT -5
Just to let you know, I haven't stopped- I'm just busy coming up with some other major scenes. This story is still alive!
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